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Locked and closed, secured from view,
all cramped and overcrowded too,
the last boxes of our marriage.

Tested and tried for all these years
shed the inhibitions and the tears
so sorry if this institution, I disparage.

All those cuddles and intimate times
all those poems and heartfelt rhymes
all of it just a waste of time.

false of thought and word and deeds
false at caring about your many needs
This was all an awful crime.
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Author's Comments

Total fantasy, NOT related to my life :D

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:iconheartbrokyn:
Well done-- I admire short pieces that make an impact, especially when dealing with emotional subjects.

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"If you ever feel like you wish to RISE UP, RISE to the occasion."
:iconeluk:
:D Thank you :D

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Simon
Smile and the whole world smiles with you :D
:iconjaswannabeme:
it happens in some people's lives, yes ;)

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"judge me for who i am and not for what you think i am" :love::heart:
:iconeluk:
:D

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Simon
Smile and the whole world smiles with you :D
:iconbeyond-the-pages:
Very sad poem... very well written, too, though somehow it feels a little unfinished. It seems to need a stanza that holds an air of finality within its grasp. But maybe that's just me. ;)

What brought this on, Simon?

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I've cut my heart out, so you can catch a glimpse of my RawEm0tion

"I'm sorry I'm not cheerier; I tried to cut myself today and it didn't really work out..."
:iconeluk:
:D Thanks Izzy, I don't know really, it started of about things in our garden shed, then the deviation deviated! :D

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Simon
Smile and the whole world smiles with you :D
:iconbeyond-the-pages:
That happens. ;)

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I've cut my heart out, so you can catch a glimpse of my RawEm0tion

"I'm sorry I'm not cheerier; I tried to cut myself today and it didn't really work out..."
:iconeluk:
:D

--
Simon
Smile and the whole world smiles with you :D
:iconbeyond-the-pages:
:XD:

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I've cut my heart out, so you can catch a glimpse of my RawEm0tion

"I'm sorry I'm not cheerier; I tried to cut myself today and it didn't really work out..."

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